the new state we have just inaugurated is unusual, entirely different from the Qing dynasty.
多词现象，词句意识是新政权和清朝比较，而in character 就含比较，在英文里是不合适的
empire是帝国意识，跟dynasty意识是接近的，一般一个Qing dynasty就够了吧
Part I Revision: The new state we have just inaugurated is unusual, entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty
Part II Analysis: The new state is just inaugurated, including the character, so it's indubitably new. Then it should be got rid of the “in character”.
Firstly, I want to show that the first letter of the sentence you have given should be capitalized.
Secondly, I must show that the sentence misses a period.
Thirdly, the verb "inaugurated" should be replaced by "established" or , because the verb "inaugurate" is usually used in such expressions as "to inaugurate a conference", "to inaugurate a new institution", "to inaugurate a new project", "to inaugurate a new age", etc.
Lastly, in my opinion, the expression "unusual in character" in the sentence is unnecessary and should be deleted.
So, in a word, the sentence should be revised as follows.
The new state we have just established is entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty.
Part I:
The page in China's history is turned by the foundation of a new state which has its own character entirely different from the Qing Dynasty.
Part II:
1. the word "inaugurate" is defined as " to operate a new building or start a public event with a special ceremony" in Longman dictionary. It's OK to inaugurate a new school or a museum, however if the object was "state" as in the original sentence, it sounds rather awkward.
2. From the google search, i found the most common collocations with "unusual" are " experiece", "things","food",and "job". "An unusual state"? I doubt. Besides, the phrase "unusual in character" was obviously a literal translation from Chinese.
3. No need for the word "empire" before Qing Qynasty. This is an instance of redundancy. There is either Qing Dynasty or Empire of the Great Qing.
No.1
the new state we have just inaugurated is unusual in character, entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty
Part I Revision:
the new state we have just inaugurated is entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty in character
Part II Analysis:
unusual 有点重复
1, The new era we have just created is unusual, entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty.
2, era represents a period of time characterized by particular circumstances, events, or personages.and so firstly I use the word era to replace state.
3, inaugurate means inaugurate a policy offically in normal condition.so I think maybe it's not appropriate here,and I use the word create to replace it.
No.1
the new state we have just inaugurated is unusual in character, entirely different from the empire of Qing dynasty
Revised:
The state which we have inaugurated is entirely different from the Qing Dynasty in character.
Comments:
The original sentence in the question has a grammar mistake, the clause after the comma has no subject. Also, I think if we use the Qing Dynasty we don't need to use empire. Same idea for new state we have just inaugurated, where new can be taken away.
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发表于 2007-11-3 18:41:12
发表于 2007-11-3 20:01:35
