有奖『翻译练习』（第十九期）

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有奖『翻译练习』（第十九期）

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   1995年10月，黄浦江上又一座大桥凌空飞架，将浦南与奉贤连接起来，成为继徐浦，南浦，杨浦三座大桥之后建成通车的第四座大桥——奉浦大桥。奉浦大桥是首座由地方筹资兴建的黄浦江大桥，奉贤县与市区有关部门和企业共同集资4.46亿元，仅用1年零7个月的时间即胜利建成。大桥的建成解决了长期困扰奉贤与浦南地区的过江问题，同时还改善了该地区的投资环境，为杭州湾北岸的开发，建设打下了良好的基础。金秋10月的黄浦江畔，徐浦，南浦，杨浦，奉浦四座大桥沐浴着金秋阳光，各显神姿，交相辉映，为上海这座充满生机与魅力的国际大都市增添了更加夺目的风采。不久的将来，上海还将建造更多的过江设施，把浦江两岸更紧密地连结在一起。

叮叮糖

There was another  new bridge flying over the Huanpu river in November,1995, the Fengfu bridge, which conects the Punan and Fengxian, and is the forth one after the building and openning of Xupu, Nanpu and Yangpu bridges. It is the first bridge which was financed by local authorities over the Huangpu River . Fengxian country and the related department in rural area together with the local corporations raised funds at the amount of 4.46 billion Yuan to build it within a year and 7 months. The buildingup of the bridge make it easier to cross the river, and  improved the investment environment,  provided the foundation for the development in the North bank of Hangzhou as well. The four bidges acrossed the Huangpu River : XUpu,  Nanpu, Yangpu and Fengpu, were bathed in sunshine and added  radiance and beauty to each other  in November, which have made Shanghai--a cosmopolitan city vigorous and vital. In measurable future, Shanghai will built more facilities for passing the river to  knit the two banks of Huanpu River together.
Thank you!

william_wan

In 1995 Nov,another bridge acrossed the huangpu river,which helped fengxian and punan join together,and then became the fourth bridge-fengpu bridge.After the building of the three bridges-xupu,nanpu and yangpu bridge.fengpu bridge was built only in one year and seven months,it is the first bridge built in the huangpu river with the support of  local government. 446 million CNY was collected by fengxin county ,municipality and enterprises.The construction of fengpu bridge not only solved the long time problems on the transportation between fengxian and punan area,but also improved the investement environment and do benefits in the developement and constructon to the north bank of hangzhou gulf.In this Nov,fengpu,xupu,nanpu and yangpu bridge acrossing on huangpu river with their great location,absorbing the sunshine ,adding more  glaring elegant demeanour to shanghai-the international big city full of  vital forceand fascination.In the future,more measures will be done on transportation on the river in shanghai,which will join both sides of pujing river closely.

pisceslulu

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In Oct. 1995, another bridge was finished acrossing the Huangpu River ,which connectted Punan and Fengxian,becoming the 4th bridge following the three bridges:Xupu bridge,Nanpu bridge and Yangpu bridge.Fengpu bridge was first bridge on Huangpu River paid by local institution , 446 million yuan raised by relative department and corporation of Fengxian country and city,and the whole project just cost 1 year and 7 monthes. The finish of the bridge dealt with the river-acrossing problem that lasted for a long time, as well as the investment circumstance and gave the base to the north bank of Hangzhou bay exploiture and construction.The sides of Huangpu river in October of golden autumn, four bridges of Xupu,Nanpu,Yangpu and Fengpu were bathing in the sunshine,displaying the wonderful appearances of each bridge and shining each other,which made Shanghai ,the international metropolis full of vital force and charm, attract more and more attentions and splendor.In a short future, more river-acrossing estabilshments would be builded in Shanghai, tightly connetting the both sides of Huangpu river.


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liustone

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In October, 1995, an bridge flew high puts up high over in the Huangpu River , connected the water's edge south with Fengxian, becomes continued the Xu water's edge, Nanpu, after the Yang water's edge three bridges completes the fourth bridge which was open to traffic to present the water's edge bridge. Presents the water's edge bridge is the seat of honor the Huangpu River bridge which finances by the place constructs, the Fengxian county and the urban district department concerned and the enterprise gathers capital together 446 million Yuan, only uses for 1 year 07 month-long the time namely successfully to complete. The bridge completed solves has puzzled south for a long time Fengxian and the water's edge the area crosses the river the question, meanwhile improved this local investment environment, for Hangzhou bay's north shore development, the construction has built the good foundation. Jin Qiu October Huangpu River bank, the Xu water's edge, Nampo, the Yang water's edge, presents the water's edge four bridges to bathe the golden fall sunlight, reveals the bearing respectively, enhances one another's beauty, filled the vitality and the charm international metropolis for Shanghai this place has increased a more eye-catching elegant demeanor. Near future, Shanghai also will construct many crosses the river the facility, closely will link Pujiang both banks in the same place.

zlb625

In October 1995, again a big bridge soars to the skies to fly on the yellow river bank river, receiving the river bank south with wise link, become after the river bank of 徐 , south river bank, a big bridge sets up after the fourth big bridge that be open to traffic- receive the big bridge of river bank.Receive the big bridge of river bank is a big bridge of the first yellow river bank river who be build by the place money raising, receiving the wise county and the downtown department concerneds and business enterprises to raise capital 446,000,000 dollars together, only use zero 7 months of a year namely the victory set up.The big bridge set up resolved to perplex to receive over a long period of time wise with south region of river bank of over river's problem, still improved the investment environment of that region at the same time, develop for the north shore of gulf of Hangzhou, constuct to beat to descend the good foundation.The gold  yellow river bank river's side of autumn October, river bank of Xu, the south river bank, YANG2 PU3, receives four big bridge  of river bank to bathe the gold sunlight for autumn, each show the absolute being , hand over to reflect mutually, increased the more brilliant elegant appearance for this international metropolis that is filled with the source of vitality and magic power in Shanghai.Near future, Shanghai will still construct more over river's facilities, the river bank the river is cross-straits to link together more closely .

deltoid

In October, 1995, the another big bridge flew  high puts up over the Huangpu River , connected Punan with  Fengxian,which became the fourth bridge（Fengpu big bridge） after the Xupu, Nanpu,and Yangpu three big bridges. Fengpu big bridge is the first of  Huang pu  River big bridge which financed and constructed by the local people ，the Fengxian  county and the district departments concerned and the enterprise  together gathers capital 446000000 Yuan, only uses 1 year and 7  month-long  time to complete successfully . The big bridge solved the question of crosses the river which puzzled people in  Fengxian and Punan area for a long time, simultaneously also improved the local investment environment, built the  good foundation for Hangzhou bay's north shore development. At Huangpu River bank, Xupu, Nanpu, Yangpu and Fengpu four big bridge taking bath in the golden fall sunlight, enhanced one another's beauty, increased the vitality and more eye-catching elegant demeanour to the international metropolis for  Shanghai where filled the vitality and the charm . Near the future, Shanghai also will build many crossing river facility, which link link Pujiang both banks in the same place closely.

tsfrank

Another big bridge,which connect Punan and Fengxian, was put up over Huangpu River in October,1995. This is Fengpu Bridge,the fourth one has been built up and been in use after Xupu Bridge,Nanpu Bridge,and Yangpu Bridge.It is the first one finished by  the local financing over the Huangu River.446 million Yuan has financed by the Fengxian County and the  related urban department.It took only 1 year and 7 months to finish the bridge succesfully.The bridge solve the crossing-river problem between Fengxian and Punan area,improve the investment conditions,and make a good base for the developing and constructint of  the north bank of Hangzhou Bay.The four bridges bath in the golden sunshine,show their figures,and shine each other over the Huangpu River in October.This add  more scene to Shanghai, the big international city full of vital force and charm.In the soon future,there will be more equipments to cross the river in Shanghai,thus the both bank will be connected each other more tightly.

royality999

In October,1995, a great bridge crossed over Huangpu River,it connects with Punan and Fengxian,and it is the fourth bridge next to Xupu Bridge,Nanpu Bridge,Yangpu Bridge over Huangpu River. It was built with local raised capital. Fengxian County and associated sections and enterprises both raised capital for 4,460 million yuan.Its completion  only cost one year and seven months.It not only solved the difficulty of travelling over the river that had perplexed Fengxian and Punan Region but also improved the investment environment.And it bulit a good foundation for develop the north bank of Hangzhou Gulf.In autumn Huangpu River shore, the four great bridge crossed over the River and showed a glorious view.They add charm and vitality to Shanghai.In near future,Shanghai will bulit more facilities to connect both banks tightly.

snowfoxy

In Oct, 1995, another bridge was built across the Huangpu River, connecting Punan with Fengxian. It was Fengpu Bridge, the fourth bridge on the Huangpu River after Xupu, Nanpu and Yangpu. As the first bridge built by local investment, it was completed within a year and seven months, costing 446 million yuan, which was raised jointly by Fengxian County and the related municipal departments and enterprises. The bridge not only resolved the problem of transportation between Fengxian and Punan, but also improved the investment environment in the area, laying a solid foundation for the development and construction of the north area of Hangzhou Bay. Bathed in the golden autumn sunshine of October, the four bridges over the Huangpu River displayed their splendor to its full beauty, making Shanghai, an international metropolis full of spirit and charm, even more enticing. In the near future, more bridges will be built in Shanghai to facilitate the transportation across the Huangpu River, connecting the people on both sides of the river closely together.

liushijun

In October.1995, fengpu bridge so called the fourth bridge that is built over the huangpu river, connect punan with fengxian. It is set up after xupu bridge, nanpu bridge, yangpu bridge. fengpu bridge is the first bridge that is built by raised money----about 0.446 billion which raised by fengxian county and related department of the city and corporation, have done with only 19 months. Owing to this bridge, it helps to solve the traffic problem between fengxian and punan long time, and it better this district’s investment environment that exploiture the hangzhou bay. Against the golden October’s sunshine, the beautiful bridge, that is to say, xupu,nanpu,yangpu.fengpu, makes shanghai city---international metropolis more attractable and charming. Shanghai people still build plenty of bridge to link with the South and the North of pu river in the future.



我对自己的翻译的评价和批评：
1，本翻译原文难度较大，至少需要3333个词汇
2，汉语的修辞成分太多，难以把握。
3，so called the fourth bridge  作为定语从句。over the huangpu river, 在。。。。之上raised money 筹款0.446 billion 美语1 billion 相当语中国10亿Against the golden October’s sunshine,在........的衬托下
4,希望得到读者的指教和帮助

whynot

In October 1995, another big bridge began to stand above the Huangpu River, connecting Punan and Fengxian, so called Fengpu Bridge. It became the fourth bridge opening to traffic after the Xupu, Nanpu and Yangpu 3 bridges. Fengpu Bridge is the first bridge constucted by local government financing. Fengxian country together with the related departments and enterprises in town totally raised 4.46 hundred millions, and only spent 1 year and 7 months to finish the construction.      

The Fengpu Bridge resolves the long-standing difficulty about crossing the river between Fengxian and Punan, and improves local investing environment, so that makes a favorable base for opening up and building the north bank of Hangzhou bay.

Above the Huangpu River in this golden autumn, the four bridge, Xupu, Nanpu, Yangpu and Fengpu show their different postures and reflect each other in the sunshine, increasing more elegant demeanour for Shanghai, the full of vital force and charm international big city. In the near future, Shanghai will build more and more river-crossing establishments to link the 2 sides of Huangpu river tightly.

tanaga

In October 1995,another bridge spanning Huangpu River was built up.It connects Punan and Fengxian,and is named as Fengpu bridge.This is the fourth bridge after Xupu,Nanpu and Yangpu bridges was constructed.The Fengpu Bridge is the first bridge that was funded by the local government.It took 446 million yuan raised by  the departments and enterprises of Fengxian county and one year and 7 months to complete.The completion of the bridge solves the long-time problem for the people to cross the Huangpu river in the Fengxian and Punan area,and improves the investment environment,laying a good foundation for the development of the north bank of the Hangzhou Bay.In the golden autumn of October, the Xupu, Nanpu, Yangpu and Fengpu Bridge,bathed in the sunshine ,show their respective characters and enhance each other,adding more elegance to Shanghai,a cosmopolis full of energy and charm.In the near future, Shanghai will build more facilities across the river to link both banks of the Huangpu River closer.

yu_xin51

In October 1995, over Huangpu River flied another magnificent bridge---Fengpu Bridge, connecting Punan and Fengxian and becoming the fourth one after Xupu , Nanpu and Yangpu Bridge.It is the only bridge invested and built with local funds over the Huangpu River. And total funds of 446 million yuan were completely raised by Fengxian county, city and district departments and enterprises. It only took 17 months to build the bridge. The opening of new bridge not only solved the river-crossing problem that had long troubled the residents in Fengxian and Punan areas, but also improved the regional investment conditions and laid solid foundation for the development of North Hangzhou Bay.In October the four grand bridges are bathing in the sunshine, revealing their own beauty and presenting an enchanting and striking contrast. They make Shanghai---an international metropolis more charming and vital.In the near future Shanghai will construct more river-crossing facilities to bring the two shores of Huangpu River closer.

In oct 1995,another large  bridge was built over the  "Huangpu" river.the bridge which named "Fengpu"bridge connected  south "udong"district and "Fengxian" district  .  This bridge is the  fourth large bridge build after "Xupu","Nanpu","Yangpu"bridge."Fengpu"bridge was the 1st bridge built  under local goverment ,enterprise and personal donations.the total money amount to 446 millions RMB,and the project only cost seven months a year completed sucsessfully. the large bridge project do favor to south "udong"and "Fengxian"peole and now they can get across the Huangpu river conveniently. At the same timethe projiect improved the investment enviroment of this two district.The project provide good basic conditions for north Hangzhou bay exploration.In thegolden autumn of october ,the river side of Huangpu,four large bridge bath autumn sunny light ,show their mythical pose  ,inflect each other ,add color and charmity to the lovely beautiful international city of shanghai.In the near future ,shanghai will build more cross-river instuments,connect the riverside more tightly!

tycoon

In October, 1995, another bridge,  built across the Huangpu River and connecting Punan with Fengxian, is Fengpu Bridge, the fourth bridge following Xupu, Nanpu and Yangpu Bridge.

The building of Fengpu Bridge is  the first bridge funded by local organizations. Fengxian county and some municipal organizations and enterprises raise 0.446 billion Yuan. The bridge is finished in senven months and one year.
The problem of crossing the Huangpu River for Fengxian and Punan area a long time has been settled and at the same time the investment environment has also improved in this areas. It lays a good foundation for the development of the north side of Hangzhou Bay.

In October both sides of Huangpu River and the four bridges are clothed in Autumn sunshine, each displaying its greatness. They add to the sparkling glamour of the international city of Hanghai full of vitality and demeanor. In the near future, more facilities of crossing the river will be set up  and both sides of the river be more closely linked.

ypl021

In October ,1995,another bridge is finished over huangpujiang ,which connects punan and fengxian ,becomes the fouth large bridge-fengpu afterwards xupu,nanpu and yangpu.This bridge is the first bridge built by local government ,the  county fengxian and cantonal relate section and government raise funds of 4.466 hundred million, and it only took 1 year and 7 months for this bridge to be built . This accomplishment of this bridge will well resolve the difficult to go through the the river ,which has been a long time problem of  fengxian and punan , and it will also improve the invest condition , it will be a good base for the construction and exploitation of the north sea shore of hangzhou . In October of the golden fall , by river bank of the four largest bridges——huangpu , xupu ,nanpu ,yangpu and fengpu ，bath in the golden sunshine ,  superinduce much more elegant of the  metropolis-shanghai ,which is permeated vital force and witchery . In the soon future ,shanghai will build much more establishmen for going through the river ,and connect pujiang’s two banks much more tightly .

travis

In October 1995, another bridge over the Huang-Pu River was built. The Feng-Pu bridge, which connected Pu Nan and Feng Xian, was the fourth one over the River. The other thre  were the Xu-Pu, Nan-pu and Yang-Pu bridge. The Feng-Pu bridge was the first one that financed by the local government. It costed the government and enterprises in Feng Xian and the City 446 million RMB. The building period only lasted 19 months. The appearance of this bridge solved the problem of crossing the River between the areas of Pu Nan and Feng Xian, which used to bother the people a lot. It also based a good foundation for the development of the North Coast area of Huang Zhou Gulf by improving the investment environment there. In the golden October, by the banks of Huang-Pu River, the four bridges - Xu-Pu, Nan-pu, Yang-Pu and Feng-Pu were shined by the autumn sunlight. They showed their beauty by shining on each other, and increased more noticab;e characters for Shanghai, the International Metropolitan full of living charm. Inthe near future, more utilities helping people crossing the River will be built, and the two sides of the River will be connected closer.

lesenhower

October,1995,a new bridge, FengPu Bridge, was built across the HuangPujiang river. It’s the fourth bridge, which was built after the completion of XuPu Bridge, NanPu Bridge and YangPu Bridge. Among the bridges across the HuangPujiang river, FengPu Bridge is the first that was financed by the locality. The construction fund , 446 million RMB Yuan in total, had been gathered by the relevant departments and enterprises of FengXian County and FengXian City, and the work completed within one year and seven months. Construction of the bridge solved the long lasting problem of across-river intercourse in FengXian and NanPu districts, improved the regional investment environment and provided a good foundation for the development of the north bank of HangZhouWan Gulf. In October of the golden autumn, on the HuangPujiang river, the four big bridges of XuPu, NanPu, YangPu and FengPu, in the shining sunlight, looked brilliant both individually and as a whole, which added ShangHai, the animate and attractive international megalopolis, with more conspicuous glamor. In the near future, ShangHai is going to build more across-river facilities, in order to link the both sides of HuangPujiang river even tightly.

yuwen007

In October , 1995 , another big bridge was built on the HuangPu River , which connects Pu-South with FengXian . It is the fourth big bridge after XuPu、NanPu and YangPu , named FengPu Big Bridge . FengPu Big Bridge is the first big bridge built by district’s fundraising on the HuangPu River. Feng Xian county and the involved departments and corporations in the city zone raised funds 446 million yuan , and took only 7 months and one year to build the big bridge successfully .
    FengPu Big Bridge solved the problem of going across the HuangPu River that had been puzzling Feng Xian county and Pu-South district for a long time , and improved simultaneity the investment environment of this region , which laid the good foundations for the exploiture of the North shore of HangZhou Gulf .
    In October , at coasts of the HuangPu River , four big bridges of XuPu、NanPu、YangPu and FengPu are bathed in sunshine of gold autumn , show respective graceful pose and reflect one another . They superinduce elegant demeanour for ShangHai , a big international city filled with vital force and charm . In near future , ShangHai will build more and more instruments across the river , by which the two coasts of the HuangPu River will connect closer .