挑战中式英语 3 【参考答案】

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修改方向：
1，语法问题
2，修辞问题
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修改建议：
1，语法有没有重大错误
2，句子结构是否平衡
3，句子主次意义的合理分布
4，英语的常态结构与汉语的常态结构，尤其是状语、补语部分
5，用词有没有重复
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题1：Hong Kong boasts of a prosperous exhibition and convention industry; there is always more than one exhibition activity held in town simultaneously.

大意是说香港的会展业很发达，每天至少有两场展览同时举行，另外，用simultaneously太夸张了

参考答案
Hong Kong boasts a prosperous industry of exhibition and convention,always with more than one exhibition being held every day.

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题2：Last week I went to Chongqing and lived in a fiend's home.His name is called Tom.He speaks English with a strong Sichuan dialect. He had gone to the barber's shop to cut his hair when I arrived, since he thought that I cannot arrive in time.

意思比较清楚。原文除了语法错误外，行文也差不多完全模仿汉语的结构。live一般用于指长时间的行为，stay则为短期的行为；剃头一般是别人操刀的，用被动态吧，或者干脆用to the barber's简单些。这几句的重心估计在于这位朋友（和我）做了什么事，而不是说描述他的英文如何，所以，主次适当分开些吧
参考答案
Last week I went to Chongqing and stayed in the house of my friend Tom, who spoke English with a strong Sichuan accent. He had gone to the barber's to have his hair cut before I arrived, since he thought that I wouldn't reach there in time.

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题3：To boost the city's sustainable development, local authorities are encouraging the development of research and development capacity.

大意是说，为了促进城市的永续发展，当地政府鼓励科研和开发。原文的词汇重复太多了，可以用替代词，也可以用别的东西。一般而言，英文对词汇重复的容忍度较低，趋向于替代方式。另外，假如为了凸显目的，也就是强调，那么to do sth /in order to do sth可以放在句首的，否则一般放后些，这个与汉语不同的。至于长状语的位置，汉语的常态为置之句首，英文的常态则为句后或谓语后面。无论中文或英文的句子，违背常态的，通常具有突显或强调的含义
参考答案
The local authorities are encouraging any efforts for research and innovation to boost(或者promote) the sustainable development of the city.