有奖『翻译练习』（第一期）（已奖励）

montana

从今天开始，『翻译练习』与大家见面了，希望有兴趣的朋友多多支持。对认真参与的朋友，我们将有金钱奖励。这个节目将以系列的形式和大家见面。 ：）
   废话了这么多，那就开始我们的第一期吧，请大家将英文翻译贴出来。不过，我们坚决反对抄袭，一经发现，轻则扣钱，重则扣威望。怕怕～～～～ ：（

原文：
一个年轻的朋友写信问我:“应该做一个什么样的人?”我回答他:“①做一个战士。”
另一个朋友问我:“②怎样对付生活?”我仍旧答道:“做一个战士。”
《战士颂》的作者曾经写过这样的话:“我激荡在这绵绵不息、滂沱四方的生命洪流中,我就应该追逐这洪流,而且追过它,自己去造更广、更深的洪流。”
“我如果是一盏灯,这灯的用处便是照彻那多量的黑暗。我如果是海潮,便要③鼓起波涛去洗涤海边一切陈腐的积物。”
这一段话很恰当地写出了④战士的心情。
在这个时代,战士是最需要的。但是这样的战士并不一定要持枪上战场。他的武器也不一定是枪弹。他的武器还可以是知识、信仰和坚强的意志。他⑤并不一定要流仇敌的血,却能更有把握地致敌人的死命。
战士是永远追求光明的。他并不⑥躺在晴空下享受阳光,却在暗夜里燃起火炬,给人们照亮道路,使他们⑦走向黎明。驱散黑暗,这是战士的任务。他不躲避黑暗,却要面对黑暗,跟躲藏在阴影里的魑魅、魍魉搏斗。他要消灭它们而取得光明。战士是不知道妥协的。他得不到光明便不会停止战斗。

davidcjs

a young friend wrote to ask me:"what kink of person should we be?"my answer is "to be a soldier."
another friend asked me "how to deal with life?" i still reply "to be a soldier."
the writer of "the praise for soldiers" once said "we live in the river of life ,which is full of torrent and waves
we ought to chase it ,and overpass it ,furthermore ,we create the wider and deeper torrent.
"if i am a candle, i would turn the dark into a bright  world .if i am a tide, i would encourage waves to clean all the old sediment .
this paragraph describes the mood of  soldiers appropriately.
at this age, we need soldiers. however maybe they dont need to go to the frontier with guns and pistols. the weapens what  they need maybe are not only  bullets,
but also knowledge ,belief and high spirit. they dont have to kill their enemies ,but if they want so, they can do so easily.
soldiers  is chasing for the bright. they  light the torch in the deep night, light the road,lead people to the dawn ,instead of laying under the bule sky and enjoying the sunshine.
dispersing the dark  is their task. they face and challenge the dark ,rather than avoid it.soldiers never compromise.never.  they will not stop  their effort until they see the bright.
抛砖引玉不要见笑

montana

davidcjs翻得不错，看得出很有功底，不过下次请注意大小写，看着会舒服点：）
大家继续，到时一并奖励。

半分

A young friend of mine inquired me in a letter: “ What sort of man should I be?” I answered: “be a soldier.”
Another friend of mine questioned me:  “How should I live?” I still answered：“ be a soldier.”

The author of A Hymn to the Soldier had ever wrote: “ Marching in the ceaseless, all-sided rushing torrent of life, I should chase after and surpass it in hope of creating a wider and deeper torrent of my own.”
“If I were a lamp, I should be used for lighting up thick darkness. If I were the sea tide, I should prompt waves to cleanse the beach of all stale accumulations.”
This quotation aptly exhibits the soldier’s state of mind.
Soldiers are in the greatest need in our time. But such soldiers do not necessarily go to the battlefield with gun in hand. Their weapons are not necessarily bullets, but knowledge, faith and strong will. They are sure to bring the enemy death without drawing his blood.
Soldiers are always pursuing for light. They do not enjoy the sunshine under the blue sky, but light the torch in the dark night for lightening people’s road to dawn. To dispel the darkness is their task. They do not dodge but face darkness, fighting against ghosts and demons harboring in darkness. They should annihilate them for light. Soldiers never compromise. They will not stop fighting unless they have light.  

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融融

      A young friend writes letter and asks me: " what kind of person should be done? " I answer him: "Become a soldier. "
      Another friend asks me: " how to deal with life? " I still answer: "Become a soldier. "The author of " the soldier praised " once wrote these words: "It is continuous in the interest , terrential life mighty torrent all sides in this for me not to agitate, I should chase this mighty torrent , and chase it, oneself is it build wide , dark mighty torrent to go. "
    "If I am a lamp, the use of this light is darkness which shines that thorough volume. If I am a tide, heave the great wave to wash all seashore old and decayeaccumulating things . "
    This passage has written out the soldier's mood very appropriately. In this era, the soldier needs most. But such a soldier might not go to the front with a gun . His weapon might not be a cartridge either. Weapon of him can knowledge, faith, strong will also. He might not is it flow blood of foe to want, can cause enemy desperately for sure.
    The soldier pursues the bright one forever. He does not lie under the clear sky enjoying the sunshine , but is firing the on fire torch darkly at night, illuminate the road for people , make them move towards dawn . It is dark to disperse, this is a soldier's task. He does not avoid darkly, but should face darkly, wrestle with Chi evil spirit , demons and monsters hiding in the shade. He wants to eliminate them and make the light. The soldier does not know compromise . He will not stop his fighting until he see the bright.

davidcjs

谢谢鼓励，谢谢指正。

tan_tcm

很好，值得学习。

tan_tcm

to斑竹，出的文章太难了，可否让更多的人参与呀。

montana

呵呵,两点建议:1.多查下字典;  2.以意译为主

tycoon

A young friend asked me in a letter " What kind of person do you prefer to be." I replied" Be a soldier."
Another friend asked me" How to look at life." " Be a soldier." I told him.
The author  of  ODE TO SOLDIERS wrote: I plough my way in the incessant and mighty torrent of life and keep pace with it. More important, I have to overstep to create wider and deeper torrent.
"If I were a lamp, I would dispel the pitch darkness with my brilliance. If I were the sea tide, I would raise waves to wash away all rotten remains." The words greatly fit the feeling of a soldier.
The soldier is the most necessary in this age. He does not necessarily go to the battlefield with guns. His weapons are not necessarily bullets, but knowledge, faith and strong will. He might not fight hand to hand with his enemy, but can surely give the enemy a deadly blow.
A soldier is in constant pursuit of brightness, but he would not enjoy the sunlight below the sky. He, however, lights a torch in the dark and light up the road for people, helping them to walk toward daybreak. A soldier's duty is to dispel darkness. he never shuns darkness but faces it,  fights against the evil hiding in the dark and finally eliminates it to gain brightness. A soldier would not surrender and never stop fighting till the bright can be achieved

iampm

謝謝大家的積極參與，偶把獎金發了先，希望繼續哦~~~

alfredo

One of my young friends once writes to me and asks:” What kind of person should we be?” I answer to him:” To be a soldier.”
    Another friend of mine also asks me:” How to meet the life?” I still answer:” To be a soldier.”
  The writer of “the eulogy of soldier” once wrote the words:” Since I surge in the continuous and billowy life onrush I should chase and surpass it for creating a wider and deeper onrush by myself.”
  “If I were a lamp, I should be used to lighten the immense dark. If I were the tide, I would make it to clean all of the accumulations. “These words correctly bring out the mood of soldiers.
   In this age, soldiers are what we specially need. However these soldiers can not always go to war field with guns and their weapons also can not always be guns and bullets. Their weapons may be knowledge, brief and the strong will. They can not always draw the enemy’s blood, but can certainly make them dead.
  Soldiers go in for light for ever. They light up the torch in the dark to lighten the road instead of enjoying the sunshine in the clear sky, so that people can make for dawn along it. The task of soldiers is to blow away the dark. They front the dark instead of dodging it and fight with the ghosts which always stay in the shadow. They should destroy them for light. Soldiers don’t know the word of compromise. They will not stop fighting until gaining the light.

ddl3

A young friend wrote to ask me:"what kind of people shall we be?" "Like a solider"i replied.
another friend asked me:"how shall we deal with life?" and my answer is the same:"like a solider!"
The author of <SOLIDER> had written:"as struggling in the continueous,  torrential river of life, i shall chase the tide, surpass it and make the wilder, profounder tide of myself ";"were i a light, i will shine to all the dark; were i a tide, i will sweep all the decay".
There words express the mind of solider appropriately.  and solider is just the  most needed in this era.
Solider does not have to take weapon and fight in battlefield, his weapon could also be knowledge,belief, and strong willpower instead of bullet and gun. He does not have to take enemy&#39;s lives, but can hold the victory in hand. solider is always following the light. He does not enjoy the sun shine, but light the torch in the dark, light the way the leads people to bright. It is solider&#39;s responsibility to fight the dark. He never avoid dark, but face them, fight against the evil in the shadow. He will destroy them and gain the bright. Solider never compromise, and he will never stop fighting before bright is acquired。

ellencheng

Be a Fighter 也许要好一些。
我们先看看材料的原文背景：

“...... 这便是我们现在需要的战士。这样的战士并不一定具有超人的能力。他是一个平凡的人。每个人都可以做战士，只要他有决心。所以我用“做一个战士”的话来激励那些在彷徨、苦闷中的年轻朋友。"

巴金1938年7月16日在上海


在当时的年代，巴金号召进步青年“做一个战士”去抗争、去斗争，应该不是鼓动他们去“当兵”。

我们在看看soldier 和fighter的常规理解：

A soldier is one who is paid by the Government to stand up and be shot at; a machine to be twisted by dumb and drunken officers, and to move as he is told, so being a soldier means being passive, obedient, and well-disciplined.

To be a fighter means to be a warrior, not necessorily a soldier. A warrior is someone who can stand up and take the challenge, won&#39;t back down in life. If there&#39;s a challenge you take the challenge, if there&#39;s a problem you take the problem, you don&#39;t give it to someone else. That&#39;s a warrior . . . and you do it with pride.

csudeng

提个建议：
能不能要求他们把译文设置成只有斑竹能看啊！
这样我一下就看到答案了！
我还怎么翻译啊！
我认为过了一段时间后再把其中优秀的译文公布，
这样有利于大家的翻译水平提高！

ellencheng

csudeng的建议值得参考。

ellencheng

  Be a Fighter

      “Be a fighter,” I answered, when a young friend of mine wrote to ask me, “What kind of man should I be?”
      “Be a fighter,” I answered again, when another friend of mine asked me, “How should I deal with my life?”
      In Ode to the Fighter, the author says:
      Swimming in the ceaseless torrent of life, I should pursue it, overtake it, and make it greater and deeper.
      Were I a lamp, I would light up the thick darkness. Were I the sea tide, I would stir up big waves to wash all filthy accumulations away from the beach.      
      This quotation is a precise description of a fighter’s state of mind.
      Fighters are badly needed nowadays. They are not necessarily to go to the battlefield with gun in hand. Their weapons are not necessarily guns or bullets. Their weapons may be knowledge, firm faith and strong will. They are not necessarily to draw the enemy’s blood, but absolutely sure of putting him to death.
      A fighter is forever going for brightness. He is not to lie in the open enjoying the sunshine, but to light torches in the dark night for people towards daybreak. Driving away darkness is the duty of the fighter. He is not to avoid darkness, but to face darkness and fight with the evils and ghosts hided in the dark. He is to eliminate them for brightness. He is not to compromise, nor stop fighting until he gets brightness.

liushijun

:“应该做一个什么样的人?” 可译；what do you like to be?
怎样对付生活?”可译;how to get a better life

iampm

Thanks for csudeng&ellencheng&#39;s suggestion and we need to discuss about whether open replyview since that may be wrongly used by some friends who want to draw other&#39;s attention and top their posts.

Thanks for all of your efforts and bonuses will be given by this weekend. Hope to see more friends join us~

montana

本篇选自《做一个战士》，是现代著名作家巴金写于1938年的一篇杂文。时值抗战初期,文章表达了作者自己的高昂思想情怀和对青年们的殷切期望。
① 关于“做一个战士”，ellencheng 的理解很到位，“在当时的年代，巴金号召进步青年“做一个战士”去抗争、去斗争，应该不是鼓动他们去“当兵”。” 所以“Be a Fighter”要好些。
②“怎样对付生活?”意即“怎样生活?”,故译为How should I live my life？
③“鼓起波涛”中的“鼓起”意即“集结”或“动员”,因此“鼓起波涛”译为marshal rolling waves。
④“战士的心情”译为the state of mind of a fighter或the frame of mind of a fighter均可。
⑤“并不一定要流仇敌的血,却能更有把握地致敌人的死命”译为 can bring the enemy sure death without drawing its blood, 其中the enemy 在指“敌军”，“敌国”，“敌对势力”时是集合名词（collective noun），动词用复数或单数均可。同理，“仇敌的血”也可译为their blood。
⑥躺在晴空下享受阳光”译为basking in the sunshine under a clear sky，其中basking除作“取暖”解外,并有“舒适”、“享受”的含义。
⑦“走向黎明”译为continue their journey till they see the dawn of a new day，其中see 和of a new day 均为添加成份，用以烘托愿意。