corundum 发表于 2007-11-27 21:47:30

Weight loss made easy.

The number one way we burn calories is exercise, number two is digesting food. Ask you doctor how many calories you should eat in a day to control your weight, Divide this by five. Eating five smaller meals spread out over a day will actually fool our body into burning more calories by working all day.

glen1111 发表于 2007-11-27 23:07:08

Weight loss made easy.


The number one way we burn calories is exercise, number two is digesting food. Ask you doctor how many calories you should eat in a day to control your weight, Divide this by five. Eating five smaller meals spread out over a day will actually fool our body into burning more calories by working all day.

there are punctuation problems (marked by ()) in the following floor

glen1111 发表于 2007-11-27 23:08:30

Some problems in your essey:
Weight loss made easy(.)


The number one way we burn calories is exercise(,) number two is digesting food. Ask you doctor how many calories you should eat in a day to control your weight(,) Divide this by five. Eating five smaller meals spread out over a day will actually fool our body into burning more calories by working all day.

1. punctuation (marked by ())
2. "spread out " shall be "distributed", I think.
3. "our body", may be "our bodies".

Excuse me for my boldness.

bryon 发表于 2007-11-27 23:26:45

Weight loss made easy.


The number one way we burn calories is exercise, another is via digesting food. Ask your doctor how many calories you should daily to control your weight, then, divide this by five. Having five smaller meals spread over a day will actually fool our body into burning more calories by working all day.
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